E Cee Kalie

This has great potential! Wow! I really like your characters and the way you develop them and their relationships. 

I have to tell you that I totally enjoyed reading this, and look forward to finding out what happens next. That's probably the best indicator of a well-conceived story line, and you definitely have that one down! You say it's part of a series, and I think that's awesome. Your premise definitely lends itself to an ongoing plot, and I like that without getting all melodramatic right off the bat, you give glimmers here and there of something more intense coming. Fantastic! Please keep writing this. I so want to know what becomes of Calie, Brady, and Emerald (I assume from your word "kids" that she had at least one more child with Brady, yes?), and expect the real conflict involving that virus will be nothing short of spectacular!- Judy Colella